Most of the readers have now weighed in, and there have been some good suggestions, some of which we are even going to use ...
First of these is to include a dramatis personae, up front, so people can keep track of who is whom.
We'll also include a glossary of terms, in the back, and the map, some version of which will probably be in the front.
Reaves and I have discussed some other changes, included among which is the death of a viewpoint character. Hate to do it, but it sets up something in the next book, and no, it's not Ven.
Here's the character list:
The Dreadnaught
Dramatis Personae
The Stahlrogians:
Borahl alb Kohn
Naval Officer, Under Commander (Yousee),
The Stahlrogian Dreadnaught Britta.
Villem nahl Tesar
Prime Prince, General in the Royal Army,
and Heir to the Stahlrogian Throne.
Tahk Berger
Ship’s Commander (Escee) the Britta.
Britta Farloon pul Tesar
Princess Consort, Wife of Villem,
daughter of the King of Dotterjord.
Hans nahl Tesar
Kaliser of Stahlrogia.
Berhard Tesar
The Kaliser’s brother.
Purgois
A spy and assassin.
Dovel
Natural Philosopher & Machinist
Sel Daveed
Natural Philosopher & Machinist
Girandhoff
Dovel’s Assistant
___________________________________________________
The Jalimatrans:
Djani Djalanji
Fifth son of the Rahjeem of Maluz.
Guru Bruj
Combat teacher and Chief of the Rajheem’s guard.
Tjela Pemaja
Mage.
Patro Kalam
Priest, Order of Aal’s Hand.
___________________________________________________
The Isbaani:
Hazin Hazin
Eunuch, Chief Guard, The Shamir’s Wifery.
Asfür
Hazin’s parrot
Sirsir ab Kaab
Grand Shamir of Isbaa.
Ahmar Liss
Savant Magician.
Sahzee
Ahmar’s apprentice.
Gamila Arous
The Shamir’s Third Wife.
Shamal
An Isbaani guard.
___________________________________________________
The Kallstranians:
Hus
King of Kallstrana
Skjegg (“Sky”)
Diplomat, younger brother to King Hus.
Telga dao Ven
Archer, King’s Guard.
Kanin Dor
Blood Mage
Surl
A lieutenant in the King’s Guard.
Dramatis Personae
The Stahlrogians:
Borahl alb Kohn
Naval Officer, Under Commander (Yousee),
The Stahlrogian Dreadnaught Britta.
Villem nahl Tesar
Prime Prince, General in the Royal Army,
and Heir to the Stahlrogian Throne.
Tahk Berger
Ship’s Commander (Escee) the Britta.
Britta Farloon pul Tesar
Princess Consort, Wife of Villem,
daughter of the King of Dotterjord.
Hans nahl Tesar
Kaliser of Stahlrogia.
Berhard Tesar
The Kaliser’s brother.
Purgois
A spy and assassin.
Dovel
Natural Philosopher & Machinist
Sel Daveed
Natural Philosopher & Machinist
Girandhoff
Dovel’s Assistant
___________________________________________________
The Jalimatrans:
Djani Djalanji
Fifth son of the Rahjeem of Maluz.
Guru Bruj
Combat teacher and Chief of the Rajheem’s guard.
Tjela Pemaja
Mage.
Patro Kalam
Priest, Order of Aal’s Hand.
___________________________________________________
The Isbaani:
Hazin Hazin
Eunuch, Chief Guard, The Shamir’s Wifery.
Asfür
Hazin’s parrot
Sirsir ab Kaab
Grand Shamir of Isbaa.
Ahmar Liss
Savant Magician.
Sahzee
Ahmar’s apprentice.
Gamila Arous
The Shamir’s Third Wife.
Shamal
An Isbaani guard.
___________________________________________________
The Kallstranians:
Hus
King of Kallstrana
Skjegg (“Sky”)
Diplomat, younger brother to King Hus.
Telga dao Ven
Archer, King’s Guard.
Kanin Dor
Blood Mage
Surl
A lieutenant in the King’s Guard.
Just sent my notes. Sorry I took forever! :-) Even though it's a bit slower paced than I usually go for these days, I'm well hooked. There are some things I'd really like to see and things I want to know, I expect in the sequels.
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I am very much looking forward to the book and the ones to follow. It is some of the more interesting and fun stuff I have read is a while.
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